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Drawing in Public by Allison-beriyani Drawing in Public by Allison-beriyani
Adapted form a recent Journal: [link]

This is now my default answer to that most annoying of questions: "Are you an artist?"

You are watching me make art. Yes.

*perhaps they mean professionally, and I usually offer a fast commission, and they seem confused when I explain that I have a price range. OH WELL.*
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I think this piece works pretty well. It speaks for itself and visually I can tell what everything is. Facial expressions also do a good job of conveying the message while remaining simple. And although it's obvious that it was colored with markers, the colors are mostly pretty good.

Here are some things I think could be improved:

:bulletblue: Panels: It's not a huge issue, but it's one of those minor details that I think can mean the difference between a great first impression and a so-so first-impression. So personally I'd try and make the borders separate for each panel and consistently either the thick line or the thin line. Doesn't matter particularly which, as long as they're relatively the same weight around the edges.

:bulletblue: 1st panel color: Seems a little too dark. It might be less of an issue if it weren't for the fact that there are some edges around the lines where the bleed makes the coloring look a little messy (compared to the rest of the comic -- if you're going for a "messy style" that's a different story). It's most noticeable around the red "frustration mark" (?) over your head. That mark itself is another small problem for me as a reader because it's not entirely clear what it's supposed to be. I'm guessing it's supposed to be the mark used in Anime / Manga style works to express frustration, except that the shape and the placement don't look to me like what I'm used to. That's actually the only place in the whole strip where I felt like there was any confusion. Although it's not confusing, I think too that making the characters in the first panel slightly larger might make it easier to see the tablet and the pen. (Nice job on the skeleton btw.)

:bulletblue: Sound Effect: The hiss in the last panel I think could be bigger and a lighter color. I'd have gone with an outline and I might have put it in that lower right corner to give it more space. That way you could color it in with a lighter color to get more contrast. As it is right now, aside from the comments I made about the first panel, it's the only place in the strip where I feel there's a color problem because of that low contrast.

And here are a couple of ideas about different ways you might go with it... not necessarily critique per se, just my thoughts about style.

:bulletblue: I might have gone with a more overt punchline like showing an actual velociraptor tearing through the hands and face of the disguise.

:bulletblue: I think I might have gone with a 3-panel strip instead of 4 and shown both characters in the middle panel with your character turning her head and looking back at the woman. Closer in than the 1st shot, but too close to see the museum exhibit. You get to see both character's facial expressions side by side and personally I think that helps with the continuity of the conversation. But to do that I probably would have also reversed the first frame so that the exhibit is on the left and the woman is on the right, that way when you get to the middle panel, your word-balloons would be left-to-right without having to do some kind of gymnastics with the tails. Actually I think I might have gone with both characters in the last panel as well so I could get an extra reaction shot in there for the woman, whether that's a shocked expression or a confused or even a blank stare.

Thanks for sharing this with the group, Allison! :highfive:

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:icongodzilladragon111:
godzilladragon111 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Dragon: ...I have a very similar reaction when asked this question...
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:iconthanathan:
Thanathan Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013
Your human costume is superb.
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks! It took me a long time to make, what with having to pour latex without the benefit of opposible thumbs.
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:iconvermillionfenrir:
VermillionFenrir Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol oh god,this is awesomeness! XDDD

All hail the raptor king! :iconheplz:
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
BOW BEFORE YOUR RAPTOR OVERLORD!!
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:icongemriqueen:
GemriQueen Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Join the velociraptor nation!
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:icongemriqueen:
GemriQueen Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ok
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
Excellent! You will be mailed your Clever disguise shortly.
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:icongemriqueen:
GemriQueen Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Awsome
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:iconmenollysagittaria:
MenollySagittaria Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:rofl::rofl::rofl:
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
I put that on all my nametags where normal people put their professions.
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:iconmeisterjay:
MeisterJay Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this happened to me once but I said I was an alien sent here to abduct all of earth's chocolate......I'm currently being tested for insainity
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
That is also an excellent reply!
I hope you pass!
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s-u-n-n-y-j Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Student Digital Artist
My gosh that's one of the most annoying questions EVER >:c
xD
Unless like your talking to someone and like your just asking questions..
but thats like... nvm xD
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
The journal Linked in the artist comments has what I view as the REALLY annoying questions.
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:iconskaramine:
Skaramine Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:XD: I love it!
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks! I recommend this reply for everyone who gets asked this question.
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:iconskaramine:
Skaramine Featured By Owner May 25, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
People fear me enough as is. :XD:
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
No they don't, if they're still asking dumb questions like that.
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:iconskaramine:
Skaramine Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
They do not ask me those questions. :iconevilplz:
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Well, there;s no reason to act like a raptor then!
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:iconskaramine:
Skaramine Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:XD:
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:iconscifimom05060:
scifimom05060 Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is hilarious! I like the last panel best. :D
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
It is a great answer to that question, and I highly encourage people to use it. Hisses and all.
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:iconsesshywolf:
Sesshywolf Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
this still makes me laugh. So much so that I'm tempted to reveal my dinosaur likeness to another dinosaur.
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Go forth and dino it up!
You will either make awesome friends, or scare off people you didn't want to hang out with anyway.
Win-Win.
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Sesshywolf Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
rawr!

If I were a dinosaur, I'd either be a triceratops, or that one vegetarian dinosaur duckbill? (I think that's what it's called?) or since I'm not really a vegetarian, I'd be some meat-eating dino.
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
The name you're looking for is Hadrosaur, or Parasaurolophus.
My favorite meat-eater is the charmingly named Bambiraptor [link]
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Sesshywolf Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012
The bottom panel just makes me smile like an idiot :D
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Most people stare and back away slowly when I do that... either you don't panic much or have very poor survival skills.
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:iconsesshywolf:
Sesshywolf Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012
I have very poor survival skills X3
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:iconzegaroth:
Zegaroth Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Genius!
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
I find inserting surrealism int random strangers days tends to make the world a better place.
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:iconzegaroth:
Zegaroth Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
True, true.
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:iconkittythenekoalien:
KittyTheNekoAlien Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i am often uncomfortable drawing in public, mostly because i don't like people watching me draw :<
especially since most people won't understand what it is anyways XD i might say "aliens", but they would probably be confused at why they have fur and aren't evil and abducting people :x
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Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Aside from the occasional idiot question, it really doesn't bother me.

"But why do they have fur?"
"Because they are mammals, and it's cold where they live."
actually, you could say any damn thing.
"because it's in fashion."
"because they looked silly in ballerina Tutus."
"because They planet has five suns and orbits it's moon."
"because it's Tuesday." (that one is especially good on any day that is not Tuesday.)
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KittyTheNekoAlien Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL XDDDDD but yeah, the first answer is basically it, along with "because i wanted them that way" as a huge general one :/
but usually it is difficult trying to explain my aliens to people who aren't my siblings or my boyfriend who are used to that kind of thing. half of what i draw isn't even on deviantart for part of that reason.
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Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Go ahead and put it up! This is a great place to find people who are totally into your strange stuff! (I never thought anyone would like my comics, but hey, they get tons of love!)
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KittyTheNekoAlien Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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Undead-Ninja-Pirate Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Student General Artist
I feel your pain. Whenever people hover over me and watch me draw, it goes a little something like this...
Hoverer: Whoa, did you draw that?
Me: No, I just scribbled randomly on the paper and the graphite manifested itself into this.
Hoverer: That's pretty neat, I never knew graphite could do that. And OH MY GOSH YOU'RE LEFT HANDED?!
Me: No, I'm left butt cheeked! (actually, I'm ambidextrous xD)
Hoverer: So you draw with your butt, then?
Me: No, I defecate with it! Oh wait, that one is actually true.
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Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
My favorite answers to "did you draw that?"

No, I just sneezed on the paper.

No, I utilized this carbon-nanosturcture delivery device to emulate the hallucinations of my prefontal cortex, as modified by the influence of dihydrogenmonoxide, sucrose and crystalline xanthine alkaloids.

No. *stare at them with my best uncanny valley face*

You're ambidexterous? My boyfriend is the opposite- non-dominant in both hands. His handwriting is horrible.
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Undead-Ninja-Pirate Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Student General Artist
Hah, nice! I might have used that third one before, and the second one sounds like something I'd say if I could pronounce it all. xD

I don't think quality of handwriting has to do entirely with dominance in hands. Also, for some reason, guys have a tendency to have sloppier handwriting than girls for some reason...
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Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
It takes a little practice, but the effect is totally worth it!

My handwriting with my left hand is made of fail.
His fail writing looks nearly exactly like my non-dominant hand fail handwriting.
This is hardly scientific, but it is compelling.
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Undead-Ninja-Pirate Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Student General Artist
I can imagine myself rehearsing that line in the bathroom mirror right now...

And that, well that's just uncanny. xD
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
This is going to be fun. >:}
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:iconundead-ninja-pirate:
Undead-Ninja-Pirate Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Student General Artist
:mwahaha:
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
:iconevulplz:
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041744 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is hilarious :D
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:iconallison-beriyani:
Allison-beriyani Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
This is the only proper reply to that question.
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