Drawing in Public

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I think this piece works pretty well. It speaks for itself and visually I can tell what everything is. Facial expressions also do a good job of conveying the message while remaining simple. And although it's obvious that it was colored with markers, the colors are mostly pretty good.

Here are some things I think could be improved:

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt="" title="Bullet; Blue"/> Panels: It's not a huge issue, but it's one of those minor details that I think can mean the difference between a great first impression and a so-so first-impression. So personally I'd try and make the borders separate for each panel and consistently either the thick line or the thin line. Doesn't matter particularly which, as long as they're relatively the same weight around the edges.

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt="" title="Bullet; Blue"/> 1st panel color: Seems a little too dark. It might be less of an issue if it weren't for the fact that there are some edges around the lines where the bleed makes the coloring look a little messy (compared to the rest of the comic -- if you're going for a "messy style" that's a different story). It's most noticeable around the red "frustration mark" (?) over your head. That mark itself is another small problem for me as a reader because it's not entirely clear what it's supposed to be. I'm guessing it's supposed to be the mark used in Anime / Manga style works to express frustration, except that the shape and the placement don't look to me like what I'm used to. That's actually the only place in the whole strip where I felt like there was any confusion. Although it's not confusing, I think too that making the characters in the first panel slightly larger might make it easier to see the tablet and the pen. (Nice job on the skeleton btw.)

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt="" title="Bullet; Blue"/> Sound Effect: The hiss in the last panel I think could be bigger and a lighter color. I'd have gone with an outline and I might have put it in that lower right corner to give it more space. That way you could color it in with a lighter color to get more contrast. As it is right now, aside from the comments I made about the first panel, it's the only place in the strip where I feel there's a color problem because of that low contrast.

And here are a couple of ideas about different ways you might go with it... not necessarily critique per se, just my thoughts about style.

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt="" title="Bullet; Blue"/> I might have gone with a more overt punchline like showing an actual velociraptor tearing through the hands and face of the disguise.

<img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="10" height="10" alt="" title="Bullet; Blue"/> I think I might have gone with a 3-panel strip instead of 4 and shown both characters in the middle panel with your character turning her head and looking back at the woman. Closer in than the 1st shot, but too close to see the museum exhibit. You get to see both character's facial expressions side by side and personally I think that helps with the continuity of the conversation. But to do that I probably would have also reversed the first frame so that the exhibit is on the left and the woman is on the right, that way when you get to the middle panel, your word-balloons would be left-to-right without having to do some kind of gymnastics with the tails. Actually I think I might have gone with both characters in the last panel as well so I could get an extra reaction shot in there for the woman, whether that's a shocked expression or a confused or even a blank stare.

Thanks for sharing this with the group, Allison! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="45" height="20" alt="" title="High-five!"/>

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